Very Sloppy Session

Author

Sibabalwe Lujiva
October 14, 2025

I need to hold myself accountable

Today was a bad day

What I was supposed to do I did not do

2/3 LDSL are done but no editing

The final was DOA, I couldn’t even get the subject line

Honestly today was a day of honest reflection

I waste a lot of time on nonsense task

I will ruin my trajectory if I continue

Today I will better

Takeaways:

The Good:

  1. Structure and storytelling: Honestly the only part that remains consistent. I still have proper flow and A→B

  2. Clarity of offer: Good enough, but could definitely be better

  3. Voice and rhythm: slight improvement, but lacking the fundamentals

  4. Visual cues: Improvement in visceral jargon

The Bad:

  1. Emotional depth is still to safe: I need to reflect the readers mental state back on them not describe it

  2. Pacing issue: Currently dilutes tension. A killer sentence is ruined by its successor. Need to improve

  3. Reliance on story over emotional pacing: Too much repetition in emotional tone, what readers need is contrast. Add doses of reflection, sarcasm, humour or hope to break tension

  4. CTA is functional not transformational: Still don’t move emotion into action. Must feel personal not instruction

  5. Editing and syntax: Too many filler words. Slows down momentum. Edit to cut out the bloat

Overall not good based off last weeks standard. Need to improve

Tomorrow is VSL’s

— Sibabalwe